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Research Writing & Publishing IV-- Proposal Defense Rehearsal--Stan (03-23-2010)
by 徐碧霙 2010-03-22 20:13:28, Reply(14), Views(1057)
 
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1. Will the proposed research problem, if successfully carried out, be a significant contribution to this area of knowledge, deserving of an M.S. degree?

 Basically yes, but the experimental design still needs to reconsider and adds more detail information in his methodology.

 

2. Does the presentation give reasonable evidence that the student is familiar with significant literature in his/her field?

 I think yes. He described a clear review and give reasonable evidence in her research field. However, you should offer an updated literature.

 

3. Are the proposed methods adequate to provide valid experimental data?

 It’s unclear explanation in slide 23, 24 and 29. The proposed method should give more clear information or reasonable proof to convince audience.  

 

4. Will the proposed experimental design provide valid data applicable to the proposed research problem?

A little bit unclear such as interview question on slide 26 and 27.

 

5.  Are the proposed statistical procedures adequate to provide valid interpretation of experimental data?

Yes.

6. Is the oral presentation clear and professional?

       

- conciseness and clarity of the presentation

Sure, but lack of research design

- correct language

Some words did not pronounce quite well, it’s “Altitude” not “Attitude”.

- quality of the slides

The table can be redesign as a perfection way.

- answering of the questions

Feel ambiguity!

- use of time

A succinct presentation, but lack of detail information!

 

 Questions:

1.      Can you explain your sampling method?

2.      About your research title, why don’t you change the word “between” into “among”, since you have three variables?

 

Comments/Suggestions

- Adding some photos or geographic map relates to your research, it will be more attractive and comprehensible in your presentation and the audience.

- Overall, this is a smooth presentation!

- Looking good!

- A little bit nervous, but still showing good confidence!

-You’d better offer more statistical proof about your target group!

 

 

 

Date: March 23, 2010

Presenter: Stan

Evaluator: Jenny

 

1.      Will the proposed research problem, if successfully carried out, be a significant contribution to this area of knowledge, deserving of an M.S. degree?

Yes, I believe Stan’s research will be a significant contribution because many people nowadays rely on word-of-mouth or word-of-mouse when selecting certain products or services.

 

2.      Does the presentation give reasonable evidence that the student is familiar with significant literature in his/her field?

Stan did not seem so familiar with the significant literature in his field because there weren’t enough literature or detailed explanations in his presentation.

 

3.      Are the proposed methods adequate to provide valid experimental data?

Yes, I think the questionnaire survey is adequate to provide valid data for his research.

 

4.      Will the proposed experimental design provide valid data applicable to the proposed research problem?

No experimental design is required in this study.

 

5.      Are the proposed statistical procedures adequate to provide valid interpretation of experimental data?

Yes, I think the proposed statistical procedures are adequate to provide valid interpretation of data. However, I think it would be clearer to provide examples of the variables that will be analyzed. Also, I think Stan could perhaps skip Pearson correlation test since regression analysis will also show the relationships between variables.

 

6.      Is the oral presentation clear and professional?

l  The presentation is quite clear, however more content and more practice would make it even better.

l  Clear and accurate pronunciation.

l  Slides are professional with appropriate backgrounds.

l  Need a little work on Q&A.

l  Presentation was too short.

 

Questions:

1.      How would you define “risky situation” on slide 14, and would you consider hot spring hotel as a risky product?

 

Comments/Suggestions

n   forgot to capitalize “p” in “Statement of Problem” on slide 3

n   should provide some examples of literature supporting the statements on slide 6 and 8

n   should explain and relate the statement on slide 14 to your research

n   need to clarify the “degree Celsius” on slide 24

n   should introduce “hot spring hotels” in Guguan and specify it in methodology part

n   need a lot of modifications on your questionnaire

n   slides 7, 13, 16, and 21 are good

 
 
 

 

1. Will the proposed research problem, if successfully carried out, be a significant contribution to this area of knowledge, deserving of an M.S. degree?

He clearly pointed out the gap of his research field (p.8). However, I think he can give us more information about the hot spring hotels.

2. Does the presentation give reasonable evidence that the student is familiar with significant literature in his/her field?

I think the information from the literature is quite old. (p. 12, 14, 15,17)

 

3. Are the proposed methods adequate to provide valid experimental data?

I think some of the questions in the questionnaire are not clear. (ex: 訊息傳撥者??)

4. Will the proposed experimental design provide valid data applicable to the proposed research problem?

Yes. But I think it’ll be difficult to collect 300 copies. GOOD LUCK!

 

5.  Are the proposed statistical procedures adequate to provide valid interpretation of experimental data?

Yes. He explained clearly in this part.

 

6. Is the oral presentation clear and professional?

Yes

Stan

Strength

Good PPT design on p.4, 7, 13, 21,25.

Good explanation on p. 21,30

Weakness

Too short

Should give us some information about the hot spring hotels

Lack of eye contact

On p. 18 is that a sentence?? If it is then you should put “.”

 

Presenter: Stan
 

1.     1.  Will the proposed research problem, if successfully carried out, be a significant contribution to this area of knowledge, deserving of an M.S. degree?

Yes, this topic is interesting and close to our daily life.
 

2.     2.Does the presentation give reasonable evidence that the student is familiar with significant literature in his/her field?

   Stan made the terms to be easy understood and the literature review parts are well organized. However, some literature review should be update.
 

3.     3.Are the proposed methods adequate to provide valid experimental data?

Yes, I think using a survey to explore his research questions is appropriate, whereas the way of the questionnaire distribution should be reconsidered. 
  

4.      4.Will the proposed experimental design provide valid data applicable to the proposed research problem?

The procedure of the research method is appropriate but the questionnaire design should have more consideration.
 

5.     5. Are the proposed statistical procedures adequate to provide valid interpretation of experimental data?

Yes, I think the statistical procedures are adequate to provide valid interpretation of experimental data. 
 

6.     6. Is the oral presentation clear and professional?

Yes, Stan’s delivery skill has improved and shown more confidence than before.
 

Questions:

If your have the age limitation of your participants, will you still set the range from 18 to 65?

 

Comments/Suggestions

I think the research hypotheses well response to his research questions and the research structure is clearly explained (slide 25). However, the part of the literature should be more specific.

Presenter
Stan
1.      Will the proposed research problem, if successfully carried out, be a significant contribution to this area of knowledge, deserving of an M.S. degree?
Yes, I think it has a significant contribution in this area because the multimedia is nowadays widespread and most of people, especially young generation, rely on it.
2.      Does the presentation give reasonable evidence that the student is familiar with significant literature in his/her field?
I think most of his literature review is kind of old. And the link between each literature part should be stronger.
3.      Are the proposed methods adequate to provide valid experimental data?
I think the questionnaire should pay more attention on the content part in order to come to the participant’s needs. Because this questionnaire is for 民宿 use, not for hot spring customer use. You should think each of the questions in detail.
4.      Will the proposed experimental design provide valid data applicable to the proposed research problem?
There’s no experimental design in his research. However, in his study, I think that his method to collect the data from hot spring customers should consider more in this part. Are they willing to fill in the questionnaire before or after taking a hot spring?
5.      Are the proposed statistical procedures adequate to provide valid interpretation of experimental data?
Yes, I think the proposed statistical procedures adequate to provide valid interpretation of experimental data. However, you could add Pearson correlation to answer your research question 1 or 2…. More specific will be better.
6.      Is the oral presentation clear and professional?
The content is better than last time. However, the link and logic in each section should be more clear and stronger.
Questions:
Why you choose Guguan to conduct your study? You did not explain in your research and that’s the reason why I suggest you should think about each slide’s connection.
Comments / Suggestions
Show your confidence because this is your study. It’s better you can answer each questions with supported reasons.

Presenter

Patty

1.      Will the proposed research problem, if successfully carried out, be a significant contribution to this area of knowledge, deserving of an M.S. degree?

Yes, I think the proposed research problem is a significant contribution to this area of knowledge. Because I think it is usually seen in business field. Customer is the biggest. To reduce the difference between customers and the provider will improve the service to benefit not only the customers but also the providers.

2.      Does the presentation give reasonable evidence that the student is familiar with significant literature in his/her field?

Yes, from her literature review, it is clear enough.

3.      Are the proposed methods adequate to provide valid experimental data?

Yes, Patty knows how to use the right methods to analyze the data.

4.      Will the proposed experimental design provide valid data applicable to the proposed research problem?

There’s no experimental design in his research.

5.      Are the proposed statistical procedures adequate to provide valid interpretation of experimental data?

Yes, I think the proposed statistical procedures adequate to provide valid interpretation of her data.

6.      Is the oral presentation clear and professional?

Yes, quite clear and comfortable peace and simple to understand.

Questions:

How do you choose the hotels? Based on the rankings from the internet? It that reliable enough?

Comments / Suggestions

Appropriate peace for your presentation

Formal dress

Smile always

Eye contact

Perfect!

 

 

1.      Will the proposed research problem, if successfully carried out, be a significant contribution to this area of knowledge, deserving of an M.S. degree?

Yes, the topic is interesting and e-promotion will be the fastest and most important way to attractive consumers.

2.      Does the presentation give reasonable evidence that the student is familiar with significant literature in his/her field?

Yes, Stan is familiar with his literature; however, he should find more powerful and convictive evidences to support his study.

3.      Are the proposed methods adequate to provide valid experimental data?

I think the questionnaire is somewhat OK. Perhaps Stan should deliberate more about his questionnaire.

4.      Will the proposed experimental design provide valid data applicable to the proposed research problem?

Yes. the data will be applicable to the proposed research problems.

5.      Are the proposed statistical procedures adequate to provide valid interpretation of experimental data?

Yes, the statistical procedures are really adequate provide valid interpretation of data.

6.      Is the oral presentation clear and professional?

1.      Dress up and nice smile.

2.      Fluent and clear pronunciation.

3.      Good explain on slide 4, 13, and 30.

4.      Clear research structure, but more detailed is better.

 

Questions:

When will you conduct your pilot and formal study? Since the season will effect the numbers of tourist, will you consider this factor?

Comments/Suggestions

1.      I suggested you may use the questionnaire survey online, for example, 104 survey website. It can provide effective ways to conduct your research more easily.

2.      Show your man power and the most confident ^_^

1.   Will the proposed research problem, if successfully carried out, be a significant contribution to this area of knowledge, deserving of an M.S. degree?

Yes, the research problem will be a significant contribution to the area since nowadays the internet becomes more and more widespread.

 

2.  Does the presentation give reasonable evidence that the student is familiar with significant literature in his/her field?

I think the literatures are quite old and limited.

 

3.   Are the proposed methods adequate to provide valid experimental data?

Yes, the questionnaire will be adequate to explore the research problems. However, some items of the questionnaire seem not be designed properly.

 

4.  Will the proposed experimental design provide valid data applicable to the proposed research problem?

The study does not include experimental design.

 

5.   Are the proposed statistical procedures adequate to provide valid interpretation of experimental data?

I think the statistical procedures will be adequate to explain the research problems.

 

6.  Is the oral presentation clear and professional?

The presentation is clear.

Sometimes the voice is not clear enough.

  The slides are clear, but some citations are not clear because of the PPT background (slide 5, 6 and 14).

  I think Stan should have certain voice while handling questions..

  It was a little short.

 

Questions:

  Why do you choose hot spring as your topic?

 

Comments/Suggestions

1.     In slide 10, there is one grammar error: How does source credibility affects consumer….

2.     In slide 27, “除非有理由, 否則我會相信他人”, I think the meaning of this item is quite vague. Maybe you can revise as “如果沒有特別的原因,我會相信他人”.

3. You can show some pictures of Guguan instead of showing the slide

   24. 

1.  Will the proposed research problem, if successfully carried out, be a significant contribution to this area of knowledge, deserving of an M.S. degree?

Yes, people tend to believe what those who really experienced traveling to the scenic spots and now matter which way is chosen, word-of-mouth or word-of-mouse, either is a good way to get the comment.

 

2.    Does the presentation give reasonable evidence that the student is familiar with significant literature in his/her field?

It is a pity that the researcher seemed not to be quite familiar, especially in some aspects that need more convincing evidence.

 

3.    Are the proposed methods adequate to provide valid experimental data?

The questionnaire content seems necessarily revised to be more solid.

 

4.    Will the proposed experimental design provide valid data applicable to the proposed research problem?

It’s no experimental design here.

 

5.    Are the proposed statistical procedures adequate to provide valid interpretation of experimental data?

The proposed statistical procedures seem adequate to provide valid interpretation of data. However, the target participants whose age expansion should be put more caution on in case of the confusion of the disable responses.

 

6.    Is the oral presentation clear and professional?

     Of course it is professional but needs to be put more efforts because it seems lack of a careful attitude.

 

Questions:

    To conduct the data collection seems to be a problem in this study, so could it be some kind of solution to it?

 

Comments/Suggestions

1.      Examples should be added to the eighth slide to make it more acceptable.

2.      Clear variables but it seems they do not quite match your research questions.

3.      The procedure of your questionnaire survey should be more solid.

1. Will the proposed research problem, if successfully carried out, be a significant  
    contribution to this area of knowledge, deserving of an M.S. degree?

    Yes. But Stan should explain the methodology part more in details.

 

2. Does the presentation give reasonable evidence that the student is familiar with 
    significant literature in his/her field?
    Yes. Stan is familiar with this field from the research background and literature
     review of each variable.

 

3. Are the proposed methods adequate to provide valid experimental data?
    It is not clear in the methodology part of participants and introduction of Guguan.

 

4. Will the proposed experimental design provide valid data applicable to the 
    proposed research problem?
 It seems that the measurement items of questionnaire are not directly related to 
 the research questions.

 

5. Are the proposed statistical procedures adequate to provide valid interpretation 
    of experimental data?

 Yes. I suggested that reliability and validity analysis should be added.

 

6. Is the oral presentation clear and professional?

 Yes. The pronunciation is clear, and the speed of presentation is easy to follow. 
 And he should show more confidence.
 
 

  Questions:

Could you please provide the hypotheses of this research?

 

Comments/Suggestions

1.  “Between” in the topic is not suitable because there are three variables.  “Among” would be appropriate.

2.  I think that questionnaire design is necessary to be introduced.

3.  You could introduce Guguan and hot springs at the beginning, not in the part 
     of methodology.

1.      Will the proposed research problem, if successfully carried out, be a significant contribution to this area of knowledge, deserving of an M.S. degree?

According to the slide 4, it provided the regular Internet user in Taiwan. Also, it mentioned that 91% Taiwanese rely on the recommendations from other consumers based on slide 5. Most important of all, the researcher provided the statement of problems on slide 8. However, the researcher may provide more information about the hot spring and Guguan.

 

2.      Does the presentation give reasonable evidence that the student is familiar with significant literature in his/her field?

The researcher provided attempting to purchase, perceiving risk and anxious, minimizing the risk and seeking information. In my opinion, the researcher should give more explanations.

 

3.      Are the proposed methods adequate to provide valid experimental data?

You should explain more clearly how to conduct your study especially for the procedure of the study. You didn’t mention the reliability of the questionnaire. You should double check the terms of the questionnaire.

 

4.      Will the proposed experimental design provide valid data applicable to the proposed research problem?

You may change the terms of the questionnaire.

 

5.      Are the proposed statistical procedures adequate to provide valid interpretation of experimental data?

Yes, it is adequate to provide the valid interpretation.

 

6.      Is the oral presentation clear and professional?

Clear and neat ppt design.

Dressed-up

You are always smile during the presentation.

 

7.      Question: How to choose these participants?

 

Comment: Be confident! You may double check to the questionnaire.

   

1.      Will the proposed research problem, if successfully carried out, be a significant contribution to this area of knowledge, deserving of an M.S, degree?

A . Yes, I think the topic of the research is pretty interesting; therefore, if the study could be carried out successfully, it would make great contribution to the field of Business.

 

2.      Does the presentation give reasonable evidence that the student is familiar with significant literature in his/her field?

 

A: As far as I am concern, Stan should provide more information in the literature review part.

 

3.      Are the proposed methods adequate to provide valid experimental data?

A: It seems that it is important for him to explain more about the way he choose his participants. Also, he should adds more explaination about the reason to choose Guguan.

 

 

4.      Will the proposed experimental design provide valid data applicable to the proposed research problem?

 

A: Some items it the questionnaires should be revised.

 

5.      Are the proposed statistical procedures adequate to provide valid interpretations of experimental data?

 

   A: Yes, the proposed statistical procedures could provide adequate interpretations for this study.

 

 

6.      Is the oral presentation clear and professional?

 

A: Yes, he handles the Q and A well. Nevertheless, he should add more explaination about this study. The time of the presentation was short.

 

 

Questions:  In slide 23, you mentioned that there will be 30 participants included in the pre-test. Is that pilot test? Or pre test?

Suggestions: You should provide more explaination about the way you choose the participants

 

2. Some items in your questionnaire should be revised.

 

3. You should add more explaination about why you choose Guguang

1.      Will the proposed research problem, if successfully carried out, be a significant contribution to this area of knowledge, deserving of an M.S. degree?

Yes. The topic is very interesting.

 

2.      Does the presentation give reasonable evidence that the student is familiar with significant literature in his/her field?

I think Stan could provide more literature to support his study.

3.      Are the proposed methods adequate to provide valid experimental data?

Yes. I think the questionnaire survey is adequate to his research

4.      Will the proposed experimental design provide valid data applicable to the proposed research problem?

There is no experimental design in Stan’s study.

 

5.      Are the proposed statistical procedures adequate to provide valid interpretation of experimental data?

Yes, I think the proposed statistical procedures are adequate to provide valid interpretation of data.

 

6.      Is the oral presentation clear and professional?

n   The presentation is too short.

n   Some pronunciations are vague.

Questions:

1.      How will U collect your data for the study? Maybe you should explain more about the procedure.

 

Comments/Suggestions

l   Good attitude toward answers and comments

l   You should add a tag of research questions on slide 3

l   Should giving more specific explanation about the gap of your study

Thanks for all of your suggestions.
Since I am still working on writting prosal, the suggestions you guys offered me do helps a lot.
Here is my answers for your questions:

Irene

1.      Can you explain your sampling method?

2.      About your research title, why don’t you change the word “between” into “among”, since you have three variables?

1. Basically, I’ll use convenience sampling method. All the tourists in Guguan who willing to fill up my questionnaire are welcome.

2. Yes, you’re right. I’ve already changed it after the presentation.

Jenny

How would you define “risky situation” on slide 14, and would you consider hot spring hotel as a risky product?

For example, the products like surgery, or with higher price, or cannot be experienced before using it can be defined as risky product. I remembered I’ve found an article mentioned hotel is a risky product, but I can’t find it now. Thanks for your asking, I’ll try to find it out.

Betty

If you have the age limitation of your participants, will you still set the range from 18 to 65?

I have to reconsider about the range of age. Maybe the maximum age will changed to 60.

Crystal

Why you choose Guguan to conduct your study? You did not explain in your research and that’s the reason why I suggest you should think about each slide’s connection.

The main reason for choosing Guguan is because I personally quiet like that place. Further, I found there are little researches about hot spring hotel, not only for purchase behavior but also word-of-mouth.

Ilisa

When will you conduct your pilot and formal study? Since the season will effect the numbers of tourist, will you consider this factor?

Yes, I did think about that. The summer is coming and people might not willing to go to hot spring in such a warm weather. I am think about conducting the research in the next 2 months or in October, because there has a annually hot spring festival.

Leya

Why do you choose hot spring as your topic?

I’m kind of love hot spring and it is seldom studied in previous study.

Andrew

To conduct the data collection seems to be a problem in this study, so could it be some kind of solution to it?

I think it will spend a lot of time to collect the data. And I think there is no solution for it but working harder.

Jeffrey

Could you please provide the hypotheses of this research?

H1: The higher the expertness of word-of-mouse the stronger the purchase intention is.

H2: The higher the trustworthiness of word-of-mouse the stronger the purchase intention is.

H3: The higher the attractiveness of word-of-mouse the stronger the purchase intention is.

H4: Consumers’ trust would affect the relationships between expertness and purchase intention.

H5: Consumers’ trust would affect the relationships between trustworthiness and purchase intention.

H6: Consumers’ trust would affect the relationships between attractiveness and purchase intention.

Lynn

How to choose these participants?

All the tourists in Guguan who are able to fill up the questionnaire are welcome.

York

In slide 23, you mentioned that there will be 30 participants included in the pre-test. Is that pilot test? Or pre test?

It’s a mistype, should be pilot test.

Sadia

How will U collect your data for the study? Maybe you should explain more about the procedure.

I will collect the data on site, and asking the tourists in Guguan to fill up the quesitionnaire.

Dear Stan,

Sorry for the late feedback...Here is my response for you~^^”~

Criteria:

1.      Will the proposed research problem, if successfully carried out, be a significant contribution to this area of knowledge, deserving of an M.S. degree?

Yes, as the purpose of the study, it may explore the relationship between experiential marketing, word-of-mouse and consumer purchase behavior. However, there is no citation to support the contribution.

2.      Does the presentation give reasonable evidence that the student is familiar with significant literature in his/her field?

From the literature review part, it gives us the significance of this study and get clearer concept of it, but some of the literature reviews are quite old.

3.      Are the proposed methods adequate to provide valid experimental data?

On slide 21, it showed the proposed methods to provide valid experimental data.

4.      Will the proposed experimental design provide valid data applicable to the proposed research problem?

In my opinion, the research design is good; more explanation is better, of course.

5.      Are the proposed statistical procedures adequate to provide valid interpretation of experimental data?

Yes, the clear data analysis provide valid interpretation of experimental data

6.      Is the oral presentation clear and professional?

        - conciseness and clarity of the presentationSuitable voice and speed

        - correct language fluently

        - quality of the slidesThe PPT is quiet good and clear, but some slides are too dark to see the citations

        - answering of the questionsMore confidence will be better

        - use of timeToo short

 

 Questions:

What are the 13 hotels in Guguan?

Comments/Suggestions

1. May put the citation on slide 8 to support the statement of problem

2. Since word-of-mouse is a new popular topic, the literature review may update to pass 2000.

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